Cray: Vivire

[Jai Hearts]

just how can i do that ?

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Chapter 8.5

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We open in the training area next the sanctum where the angels and the knights train as Jair fights an unknown person, knocking him to the floor.

Jair: Next.

Everyone looks around, but non of them wants to spar with him.

It's been months since Garmore left with his Gold Paladins, now lead by a new knight with golden hair like a lion.

Then one by one more forces from each section of the Sanctuary where send to battle, leaving only the youngest warriors to train and the oldest warriors to instruct them.

Name: Man why does he look so mad today ?

Aina: Well his wife left him yesterday.

Name: Right the angels where the last one to leave. No wonder hes so...

Aina: Unbalanced ?

Name: I was gonna say upset.

We see Jair toss another warrior to the ground.

Name: But unbalanced seems to fit.

Jair: Now I'm ready for swords.

Every close to the training field backs up as Jair unseats a sword.

We zoom out in the distance to see an man next to a young female.

Arthuria: Father why would you would you wan't me to take them ?

Pendragon: They are the future, the Child from the Name clan Joseph Name, Aina of music armament corps and The young knight with a sea of potential Jair.

Arthuria: A pampered child, an elf and a tempered child. This will be my army ?

Pendragon: Don't forget yourself, my narcissistic daughter. Every leader has to start from somewhere.

We see Jair, Aina and Name at the front-gate of the Sanctuary.

Arthuria: Thank you all for meeting me here, I am Arthuria and I will be your leader for this mission.  As you may know All of our main forces are engaged in a war against our unknown foe leaving a great portion of our nation virtually undefended.
That includes the Sacred Volt.

Aina: Whats the Sacred Volt ?

Arthuria: Tell me first how much you know about the Sacred Beast Armor's ?

Everyone remains silent.

Arthuria: *signs* Figures.

Jair: In the middle of the United Sanctuary and Dragon Empire there is an almost endless dungeon filled with many many armaments that can not be used, but the truth is they must choose there own wielders.


Arthuria: Correct. There have been sightings or thieves heading there. Our mission is to capture them.

We see a glimpse of the thieves with demon like appearance walking in a ruined area, in one of there sacks an egg.

Arthuria: Do you all except this mission ? 

Cray Vivire

Chapter 8.5

The end...

We see a mansion on-top a mountain with a male elf with pale skin looking outside threw a window.

...for now

thanks i will try to set all the chapters on one page

[Jai Hearts]

Spoiler

We open to a black colored robot flying in the sky, we see inside Ravager on a tv screen.

Ravager: Do you understand your mission ? You are to help Abram's team get to the goal.
Once you reached the goal you are to remport back to me. 

Pilot:...

We see the black colored robot fly off into the blue sky.

Cray Vivire

Chapter 9

We return to Abram's ship where Jai and Zara hold Abram hostage, while Kuri also holds Maya hostage.

Jaden pointing his spear at Kuri shoots her a glare.

Jaden: You really are hopeless huh. No idea, no rationality. All you wan't to do is fight for him.

He said pointing the speak at Jai.

Kuri: Yea.

Jaden: O well. Abram.

Jaden turn's to look at Abram.

Jaden: I quit !

Jaden tosses the spear hitting Abram in the chest.

He grabs a walky-talky from his side and sets it to hes mouth.

Jaden: Attention all crew member, it's danga zone time !!!

Suddenly multiple crew members strike one another down.

Kuri: Jaden.

Jaden: Don't get me wrong i needed to do this sooner or later.

He said shooting Kuri a jubilus smile.

Both Jai and Zara stand stunned, unknown to what is currently happening.

Jai: What the heck is going on ?

We flashback to Jaden whispering into Kuri's ear.

Jaden: Meet me in the hanger at 8.

Kuri enters the hanger area of the shop which holds multiple robot like machines.

Jaden: you like em ? There all different machines the Captain bought from Ravager.
It's not a bad idea you know ? Seeing how this isn't a cardgame the guy with the biggest guns always win.

Kuri: Why did you call me here Jaden.

Jaden: Kuri, come on its me. Why can't you call me Jay ?

Kuri:...

Jaden: O right, you already have a Jay.

Kuri:...

Jaden: See Iiiiii always hated our so-called  leader. He always sends everyone else to there death's. If someone weakness there opponents enough he kills them instead, taking everything for himself.

Kuri: Then how are you so strong.

Jaden: I was already strong when he found me. The thing i hate the most is he uses the people he's spouse help. The men are his personal maids, while the women...his toys.

Kuri: You want me to help you bring him down.

Jaden: Eeeeh, wrong.

We return to the present.

Jaden: All right my matey's. This ship is now under the rule of the not cute,flat-chested, un-girly like Capt.Kuri !!!

Kuri: I will murder you in your sleep.

Jaden: Did i mention she's a yandere folks ?

Abram is on the floor crawling.

Abram: You little snot's, you will rule the day you messed with me. DO YOU HEAR ME.

Maya kick's Abram in his wound.

Maya: Shut up and die you perverted old man.

Everyone else: What a personality change.

Maya: Jaaay.

Jai: Who me ?

Maya runs into the arms of Jaden.

Maya: I was so worried that you would get hurt.

Jaden: Dummy, I told you i would save you.

Everyone: Awww.

Jai: Wait, anyone else suddenly feel weaker ?

We see Abram on the floor slowly transforming.

Abram: Kill you, KILL...YOU...ALL.

Jaden: O nerdz, we need to get him outside !!!!

Zara tries to stab Abram, but the blade will not penetrate no matter how much she forces it.

Zara: We should get him outside.

We see everyone that was in the room carry a slowly transforming blob of flesh.

Jai: Why is he taking so long to change.

Kuri: Because if he changes in here he would take out the ship with him and his only solid ground for few hundred feet.

They take Abram to the hanger and back away from him.

Abram transforms into Galactic Beast, Zeal.

Zara: No wonder we got so weak. He's draining us !!

Abram: Ahhhhhh!!!

Kuri: Attack !!!

Everyone attacks Abram doing almost no damage.

We see Maya pauses for one costly second.

Abram: Maya !!!!

Abram prepares to fire an energy beam from his face when suddenly Jai and Jaden stabs him in the face.

Jaden: Nice going Jai.

Jai: You two Jaden.

FEEL THAT BROMANCE.

Abram gets back up preparing to fire.

Everyone trying to fight but are visibly to weakened to stand.

Jai: Nice knowing you bro.

Jaden: And you too man.

FEEL THAT BROMANCE.

As Abram is about to fire his beam, another beam of light fire threw him killing him.

Everyone turns to see the Stern activated.

Raijin: The power of bromance, HAS REVITALIZED ME !!!!!*faint's*

We move to the sick bay where we see Raijin waking up and next to his bed stands Jai and Kuri.

Jai: Welcome back to the world of the living.

Raijin: Hey guy's, I had the weirdest dream and you where in it, and you, and you, and you.

He say's pointing at everyone in the room.

Raijin: What happened ?

Kuri: It's a long story.

The piece is quickly broken by an announcement alert.

Announcer: Attention, attention. Capt.Kuri please report to the main deck immediately.

Kuri: Now what ? What's wrong ?

Female: It's a mobile suit, close by.

Kuri: It must be the machine Ravager send over.
Open communications. Attention pilot i am vice capt.Kuri, can you respond.

?: I was ordered to only make contact with Abram.

We hear a machine like voice.

Kuri: He's currently entertaining female guests. You will have to talk to me.

?:..I will only talk to Abram.

Kuri: Listen to me. If you do not land your suit we will consider you hostile and open fire.

?...very well.

Female: Communications have been cut.

Kuri: Do we have anyone that can pilot those suits ?

Jaden: Only one of them still works. The rest are too damaged beyond repair.
However we where able to upgrade the new blau we got and best of all we have an experienced pilot onboard.

Kuri: No I won't send Raijin into battle.

Raijin: Then it's a good thing you don't have to.

Both Jai, Zara and Raijin enter the room.

Kuri: Well I object.

Raijin: OVERRULED !!! Even halve dead I'm a better pilot then anyone in this ship, and your telling me to sit back ? Hell no Cap.

Kuri:...fine. Ensign Raijin get to your station.

Raijin: Ensign ? *he said with a smile on his face*

We see Raijin getting into an upgraded Blau as the rest look on at a screen.

Female: It's here.

Kuri: Raijin !!!

Raijin: You got it !!! GALAXY BLAUKLUGAR, TAKING OFF.

We see the galaxy powering up and launching.

Raijin: Woohooo.

TO BE EPIC

special thansk to just for the new spoiler bar ideas, i will start setting the chapters on the first page when i have the time.

Next week its gonna be more about action action freaking mecha fight action, as volume 2 slowly comes to a close.

leave a feedback and if you want your character to be in this fanfic just ask, however you might not appear anytime soon *caught*lancer*caught*.

[[T.CC]Axs]

As always nice chapter man... and I'll take on that offer, I'm asking you if I can be a character on that.. I dont know what that implied tho..

[Raien D. End]

nice chapter...i like the BROMANCE!Feel the BROMANCE!

[Lance Korilum]

Special thanks to Just for the new spoiler bar ideas, I will start setting the chapters on the first page when I have the time.

Next week its gonna be more about action action freaking mecha fight action, as volume 2 slowly comes to a close.

Leave a feedback and if you want your character to be in this fanfic just ask, however you might not appear anytime soon *cough*lancer*cough*.

>_>  You said I'd be getting a cameo this volume...  Doesn't that count as "anytime soon" ?  (also took the liberty of fixing your mistakes in the post-chapter.  See how much better and more professional it looks now?  That's why you should get a proofreader.)

[Jai Hearts]

As always nice chapter man... and I'll take on that offer, I'm asking you if I can be a character on that.. I dont know what that implied tho..

nether do i, but i never know where my creative process with take me.

if you have some interesting ideas for your character pm them to me, mostly try thinking of a character type that doesnt excist yet in cray vivire.

lance wait and see.

also whats a proofreader?

[Jai Hearts]

ok ive set all the current chapters on the first page and the all the ones that are coming i will set there.

i will post new chapters on the last page, however i will modify my old messages to add then to them.

[Just]

A proofreader Jai, is someone who reads over another person's writing (or their own), and fixes all the incorrect typographical errors and mistakes in grammar, style, and spelling. (just copy pasted that last part because I loved that explanation)

In other words, he wants you to have someone fix all of the mistakes in your writing. (Since your writing capabilities right now are mostly on the creative side and not on the grammatically correct side)

P.S: Thanks for putting all of your writing in the first page now!
If you add colors and bold the titles for the chapters, it'd look really neat. Maybe add a little picture at the bottom of it too so that people can have an idea of the world they're about to enter!

Proofreading Page(To help you)

[Jai Hearts]

sadly just i have no art ability but i would love to set an image.

but if someone would help me out with one would be good.

as for editing the color i will do that some other time, maybe i should send it to seiryuu since he already offered to do spell check for me.



maybe this one if someone can help me out and putt a good sign on it ?

[Just]

Try this. It's much smaller and wider-- don't use such a huge picture xD.
I suggest you put it at the bottom of your main page to make it look much neater.

[Jai Hearts]

i posted the bigger one hoping someone and add the sign            CRAY
                                                                                                        vivire

[Raien D. End]

when im back...all will be locked and punished...muahaha

[Jai Hearts]

Spoiler

We open at an airport as cherry blossom petals float in the air, a Kuri stand's awaiting someone.

Kuri: It has been so many years since I have seen my best friend Yata.

*Flash back to the past where we see little Yata and Kuri playing in the sand*

Kuri: We used to be inseparable since we where in diapers.
We used to spend every day together up until the day he moved away.
I never told him but i always-ed cared for him, maybe now that we're both older i can finally tell him how i feel.

Yata: Wow its been such a long time

Kuri turns around to see the current Yata which looks something like this:


Yata: Kuri darling. <3

Kuri: Eh.....THE WORLD HAS FAILED ME!!!

Cray Vivire Omake 4

[Raien D. End]

Hahaha...that look...

[Jai Hearts]

Chapter 10

Spoiler

We open in the sky as the black robot flies at the ship.

We see something launching from the ship with grate speed heading up into the air.

With the sun behind the object it is almost impossible to see a beam shooting down.

The black robot quickly dodges beam, as its head looks up into the sky.

Raijin: Let's go Free...I mean Galaxy !

[video] https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Bv_etp_N_E0 [/video]

The two machines engage in an epic battle as they cross swords.

Female: The Galaxy has engaged the enemy.

Male: Target appears to the very versatile compared to the Galaxy, your thoughts Captain ?

Kuri: Raijin still has more attacking capability then the enemy. Having funals at his side. (funals are little flying guns)

We see the funels firing at the black robot as one hits it.

The Galaxy rushes in trying to slice it with its beat sword, but the black robot grabs the Galaxy's hand.

Raijin: what.

Kuri: How is that possible.

Male: Target is emitting powerful electro-magnetic-wavelenght's.

Kuri: It's doing what now?

The black robot shines with a bright yellow light  as it transforms.

Kuri: What the hell is that thing ?

Maya: Banshee. That's what that pervert called it.

Kuri: Then that makes it, Blau Banshee Norn.

Kuri seems puzzled as to what to do next.

Kuri: Jai, get into the unicorn, you're launching.

Jai: But I never pilot a mobile suit before.

Kuri: Ensign Jai get in the freaking machine !!

Jai: Yes sir, I mean mem.

We see Raijin Struggle with the Banshee from afar.

Raijin: Damn, why is it so fast ?

We see  Jai at the cockpit of the unicorn.

Jai: Get into the suit she says, does she ask if i know how to pilot it noooo.

Hunter: She sounds like a total nagger.

Jai: Yea i know right ?

Jai turns around to see hunter behind him.

Kuri: Whats taking him so long ?

Female: Sir, we have a situation in the hanger.

We see multiple people with long range weapon pointed at the cockpit where hunter in the from of Blade Wing Reijy holding a blade to Jai's throat.

Jaden: Hey good buddy.

Hunter: You stabbed me in the back.

Jaden: Actually i speared you. How are you still alive anyway ?

Hunter: Shadow clones.

Jai: You can do that ?

Hunter: Well with Devil in Shadow I can.

Jai: That is so awesome.

Hunter: I know right ?

Jaden: I think its awesome too.

Hunter: Shut up you.

Jaden: What are you gonna do now Hunty ? you can't escape from here.

Hunter: Not on my own, but with this mobile suit I can finally reach the mountain top.

Jaden's face turns darker as he prepares to chug his speak.

Jaden: Sorry Jai, but it can't let him leave with that machine.

Jai: I prefer not to die thank you.

Hunter: Even if you kill me I'm just another clone. The real me will always come back to hunt you.

A light arrow hits Hunter in the head, he vanishes immediately.

Zara: No you won't. The fact that He couldn't make an army of himself to attack us all and needing that suit to escape means that that was the real hunter.

Jaden: Dude your girlfriend is hardcore.

Zara: Jai, what are you waiting for ? Get going.

Jai: Right.

Outside in a nearby cave we see a cyber woman looking at the battle.

CW: Cradle operational.

We see behind her in the shadow multiple metal testicles and a cyber man with red eyes.

Jai: Launch preparations complete, detaching from ship !!!!

The Blau Unicorn lunches with a jetpack attacked to its back for flight.

The Unicorn locks on to the Banshee and fire a power full beat missing it only by an inch.

Raijin: Jai, flank him !!!

The Galaxy surrounds the Banshee with every beam it has, leaving it immobilize.

Raijin: That's all I have, Jai shoot it !!!

The Unicorn transforms with a red light glowing from it as it prepares to fire.

Jai: This is it.

Female: UNICORN ABOVE YOU !!!

From above he see a Revenger, Desperate Dragon heading towards the unicorn with Vidi riding on it.

The Dragon Lands on the Unicorn as it fires the guns in its head.

The Dragon rips the cockpit door off.

Vidi: Burn him.

The dragon unleashes black fire in the cockpit burning the pilot.

To Be Continued.
 
 

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do you like it ?

do you want more ?

do you want more yata ?