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Title: Rolf's Fanfic: Superior JUSTICE!
Post by: Rolfagia on July 14, 2014, 01:36:29 AM
Ok, decided to drag my fanfic form my blog to here (since my blog's so quiet xD).

I have 18 chapters by now, but since add all at once is too much, I'll post 1 each week by now till chap 18, after that might take more time since I'm writing (or not, I'll complete, have tons of ideas, but might take a time).

Every chapter will be at a "spoiler" and at this post to make it simple, easy to find. ^^

Also, Rairai and Sei are helping fixing the typo problems with chapters, and with their feedback I was able to change a little of my writing style.

For propaganda purpose, my blog: Rolf's VG (http://www.rolfsvg.blgspot.com.br). Check if out if you want =3

Well, I think i told enough by now, enjoy the chapters:

Chapter 1 - The Melody at Lunch
The sun is shining brightly, bringing the heat, despite the fact that it was the start of the winter. Leaves are falling from the trees. it could be noticed from the classroom's window. The teacher were explaining some lores from Cray's universe as some students wrote about it, some type at their laptops and others heard it. Since the last week's sleeping-in-session-problem, no-one dared to sleep anymore.

The bell rang and the students packed and moved out. The soul Saver Nest was an academy for Cardfighters, where only a selected group could enter. Wasn't the best one, but was famous: Like the dragon, they fly higher than others, Roaring their arrival.

A boy with a purple hair ran, dodging others in his way to the cafeteria. Watching the flow of people running and walking through the corridors, hitting some people sometimes but nothing hard enough to cause trouble.

Five minutes later, the boy noticed the cafeteria, some people were eating, some at the line to get the food... But all were looking the center: A cardfight was over at that moment, the holograms were off and the guy simply moved out, looking down as the other player, a Sophomore, were crossing his arms and laughing.

Without knowing what he hell was going on, thinking that was simply freshman bully, The boy walked there, moving his hand inside his jacket and pulled a deck, getting ready at the table. The senior sat after the game, drinking soda when he noticed that

Senior: Haaan? looks like we've another one here - Said, standing - Present yourself for your Superiors!

??????: Edrien Shintallas, Freshman.

Senior: Shintallas... Nope, never heard about it... I presume you know what'll happen after this game if you lose: You can't lunch here for a week! Principal Merrick told us to do this with the freshman since the nest's full. Only the ones that can force they way to the top can win it!

The boy moved his hand to the back of his neck, scratching it.

Edrien: ... I don't like that... but if the principal said... Works for me then. - put his starter card at the  VG circle. Whenever you're ready.

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Senior: Stand Up! Vanguard
Edrien: Sing with me, My vanguard!
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The different way to call the card was recieved with a wave of laughs from all sides, as the people noticed the cards in game:

Senior: Vermillion Gatekeeper!

Edrien: Bermuda △ Cadet, Riviere!

Senior: I won't go easy on you because you're a girl! - Draws - Ride, Alluring Succubus. Double soulcharge: Succubus and Gatekeeper skill - Sends the top two cards, Demon Bike of Witching Hour and Free Traveler, to his soul - Turn End (5H/0D)

Edrien: Draw, Ride! Mermaid Idol, Riviere! With this, I activate my Starter Riviere skill, looking the top 7 cards form my deck to..

Senior: Ok Ok, no need to explain it all for us! Shut up and do it

Nodding, the boy looked the top 7 cards and revealed a Top Idol, Riviere. The six other cards were moved to the deck as he shuffles it.
<><MR><>
<><><>
Edrien: I attack with Riviere!
Senior: No guard
Drive: Izumi
Damage: Jet Black Poet, Amon

Edrien: Turn End. (6H/0D)

Senior: Draw and Ride! Emblem Master. I call Demon Bike Witching Hour, Blue Dust and Yellow Bolt. Yellow Bolt's skill, soulcharge! - Rest him and moves the top card, Histerical Shirley, to the soul.
<><EM><BD>
<><DB><YB>
Senior: Blue Dust Attack!
Edrien: Guard with Cooking Caspi!

Senior: Not over ye! Emblem Master attack with Demon bike's boost! (17)
Edrien: No guard
Drive: Blitz Ritter (Critical)
Senior: Power and critical to the vanguard!
Damage: Top Idol, Ceram and Cooking Caspi
Edrien: Draw trigger, Power vanguard and Draw.

Senior: End.(3H/1D)

Edrien: Draw, Ride! Super Idol, Riviere. Skill - Draws - Call Izumi, Sedna and Miltoa. - Both drew cards.
<><RV><IZ>
<><MT><SD>
Riviere attack with Miltoa's boots.
Senior: No Guard.
Drive: Sedna
Damage: Cursed Doctor (Heal)
Senior: All attack power to Emblem!

Edrien: Boosted by Sedna, Izumi attack your Blue Dust. (6H/2D)
Senior: No guard - moves him to the drop zone. - My turn now, Draw! Come form the deepest Kingdom from hell! Ride! Demon World Marquis, Amon! Call Demon of Aspiration, Amon.
<><A3><A2>
<><DB><YB>
Aspiration Amon Attack your Izumi With Yellow Bolt's boost! - Edrien Didn't guarded, moving the card to the drop zone - With 8 cards at his soul, Amon attack, boosted by Demon Bike!
Edrien: No guard
T.Drive: Demon Bike, Mad Hatter of Nightmareland (Draw)
Senior: Power to the Vanguard, Draw! (4H/2D)
Damage: Super Idol, Riviere.

Edrien: Draw, Let us play a melody together! Ride! Top Idol, Riviere! - Draw a card - I call Izumi, Top Idol, Ceram and Miltoa - Both Draw Again.
<CR><RV><IZ>
<MT><MT><SD>
Boosted by Sedna, Izumi Attack.
Senior: Guard with  Blitz Ritter!

Edrien: Boosted by Miltoa, Riviere Attack!
Senior: No guard
T.Drive: Drive Quartet, Shuplu (Critcal)
Power Ceram, Critical Vanguard.  - Mermaid Idol, Errie
Damage: Demon World Marquis, Amon, Yellow Bolt

Edrien: Ceram attack, boosted by Miltoa... Counterblast!
Senior: ... 25k... No guard
Damage: Cursed Doctor
Senior: Heal trigger! - Moves the amon from his damage tot he drop zone.

Edrien: End. (7H/3D)

Senior: Draw! Yellow Bolt skill - Soulcharges another Demon bike. - Perfect! I use Amon's Counterblast! - Flips the damage and Moves Yellow Bolt to his soul. Edrien Moves his Sedna to the Drop Zone. - I call Another Demon Bike and an Alluring Sucucbus, Soulcharge! - Prisoner Beast.
<><A3><A2>
<><DB><DB>
Boosted by Demon bike, Amon attack! I've 11 cards at my soul and two of them are Demon Bikes! total of 31k!
Edrien: No guard
T.Drive: Dark knight of Nightmareland (Critical)
Senior: Critical vg, power to Rearguard Amon! - Courting Succubus
Damage: Top Idol, Riviere, Mermaid Idol, Errie.

Senior: Boosted by Demon Bike, Aspiration Amon attack. With more 6 cards at my soul, my Amon gets a power boost...
Edrien: Total of 26k With the trigger.
Senior: ... Don't you dare do that to your senior again! I attack your vanguard!
Edrien: Intercept with Izumi and guard with  Shuplu

Senior: End (4D/5H)

Edrien: Draw! I call Another Top idol, Ceram.
<CR><RV><CR>
<MT><MT><SD>
Riviere attack with Miltoa's Boost!

Senior: No guard!
T.Drive: Mermaid Idol, Riviere, Drive Quartet, Flows (Heal)
Edrien: Heal Trigger! - Moves Caspi out of his Damage Zone to the Drop Zone - All power ot Sedna
Damage: Evil Eye, Bassilisk

Edrien: PERSONA BLAST! - Flips two damage and discart a top Idol, Riviere. - I'll give a 5k powert to each Ceram and to the Standing Miltoa! Ceram boosted by Miltoa, Attack! Counterblast! total of 30!
Senior: G-Guard with Dark Knigt, Shirley and Courting Succubus. intercept With amon
Edrien: To finish this: Ceram attack with Sedn'as Boost! Counterblast! total of 31k!
Senior: ... - Close his eyes - No guard...

Damage: Evil Eye, Bassilisk
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The game was over and Edrien gets his cards, moving his hand in front of the Senior.

Edrien: Good Game.

the senior smiled, shaking the boy's hand

Marcos: I'm Marcos from 2-D and I give you a warm Welcome, Edrien Shintallas. While they'll continue the tests, let me show you the food, especially because i'm hungry.

Both of them laugh, as they move to the line to get the food. one of Marcos's Friends went to test others. Both sides were boosted and excited now to play  The Freshmans because they weren't invincible, the Sophomores's because they needed to maintain their reputation... Little by little, the shinny light of the nest was getting more intense there...


Chapter 2 - Team's Choices

The two fighters were eating at the table. Marcos choose pratically a mountain made of steak, as Edrien took some salad together. Took no time for Marcos to look at him and open his mouth, making some pieces of the food fly to his mouth.

Marcos: So boy, have you decided which team you'll enter?

Edrien: Teams? - Asks, As he cleans his face

Marcos: ... Yeah, like me and the boys there. - Points to the group fighting with others to decide if they'll eat or not there - We're the Dark Army. A strong team formed by strong players... Too bad the leader's rules tells: "Dark Zone only"... So you can't play if you don't change your deck.

Edrien scratches his head, thinking about that team stuff. Marcos cleans his mouth while the boy thinks.

Marcos: But... I know a person  that would welcome you. After the lunch time, the teams'll be at the Gym. Each team has a specific place to invite members. Don't worry about it, I'll recomend you to a nice one. - Laughs

Speechless, the boy laughs less than Marcos, as he doesn't know what would happen. At the end of the lunch time, the cafeteria was empty, as seniors and Sophomores were getting ready to do their stands, and some Freshman  wanted a spot for the "top teams". Following Marcos's instructions, he didn't rushed and walked to the gym.

The problem was: at the moment Edrien entered there, a mob of sophomores were climbing one over the other, trying to invite him and others around him. Even with the pressure, Edrien's quick footwork made him able to dodge them.

Then, he continued to look the stands, thinking which kind of team was the one Marcos would reccomend him... As he hears a voice:

?????: You're Edrien?

With a negative answer from a person, the boy wth a short, blonde hair and blue clothes quickly moved and asked others, and it was kinda annoying to others

Edrien: ... I'm Edrien...

With the information, the boy look at him with a smile

?????: Finally! Come this way quick quick! - The boy pulls Edrien, pushing him between the crowd, until they're at a stand with a huge Daiyuusha made with painted cardboard - Here! Yamatooo!!

The boy waves his ahnd, calling another person. A man with a black, pointy hair with a emotionless expression that ended a game.

Yamato: ... So... That's Marcos's recomendation..? - His voice was quiet and slow. He walks until he was close of both, as his green eye shine as he look the person. - ... Doesn't look... That impressive... Yurei...

Yurei: He defeated Marcos at first shot! He'll be a perfect member for our squad of Justice!

Yamato: ... - Closes his eyes, having a simple smile - ... I agree... At least we've another member... Welcome...

Yamato moves his hend to greet Edrien, that answer by shaking his hand. While that happens, some guys came closes, as Yamato notices one of them being one of the people he tested some minutes ago. That one points to him and a bigger person moves. Yamato's eyes shine again, and he starts to change some cards from his deck.

????: Yamato,  I heard about those boy's games with you. If they got so close to win, why you didn't let them enter? - The guy asks.

Yamato: ... Hugo-Senpai... Our team doesn't need people that cared about victory only... - Answers - They're not acting like someone we want at our team... Or had a reason... Like Edrien... To be one of us...

Hugo glares at the boyand puts his deck at the table. Yamato answer by placing his deck too

Hugo: Let's play. if I win, you'll let them enter

Yamato: ... And... If I win... Your team'll be disbaned...

Yurei: NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOT! - He stands at the side of the table, with his arms crossed in front of his chest. - It's not fair! - Hugo and Yamato look at the boy, confuse - Disbaning a team would only create more chaos to the world! And we need to bring justice, not punish them. Then, if Yamato wins, You can't recruit any member this year, Hugo-Senpai.

Both agree, as Yamato  lifts his left hand and does a V signal with his hands

Hugo: You're telling I'll end at the second turn? Pretty brave even for you Yamato. - Smiles

Yamato: ... Hugo-Senpai... You'll fall with a Grade 2 Vanguard...

Hugo: That we'll see! Get ready!.

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Hugo: Stand Up! Vanguard!
Yamato: ... Stand Up... Vanguard...
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Hugo: Dragon Egg!

Yamato: ... Lizard Soldier... Conroe...

Hugo draws first, choosing a card from his hand

Hugo: Ride, Savage Swarrior! I move Dragon egg to a RG Circle.(0D/5H)
<><SS><>
<><DE><>

Yamato: ... Draw... Ride Iron Tail Dragon... Move Conroe to a RG Circle and call Enbodiment of Armor... Bahr to boost Conroe...
<><IT><CR>
<><><BA>
... Iron Tail Attack...
Hugo: No guard!
Drive: Embodiment of Spear, Tahr (Critical)
Yamato: ... Power Conroe... Critical Iron Tail...
Damage: Ravenous Dragon, Megarex and  Tyrant, Deathrex.

Yamato: ... With Barh's boost... Conroe Attack...
Hugo: No guard.
Damage: Ravenous Dragon, Megarex.

Yamato: ... End...  (0D/5H)

Hugo: Draw! Good! Ride Cannon Fire Dragon, Cannon Gear! I retire Dragon egg for his skill and I pay his Counterblast, moving him to my hand. - Flips Deathrex at his damage - I call Dragon Egg again and another Cannon Gear, doing the same with Dragon Egg - Flips a Megarex and moves Dragon Egg to his hand. - Call Sonic Noah.
<CG><CG><SN>
<><><>
Rearguard Cannon Gear attack Iron Tail!
Yamato: ... No guard...
Damage: Dragon Knight, Berger

Hugo: Vanguard Cannon Gear attack Iron Tail!
Yamato: ... Guard with Iron Tail...

Hugo: One trigger? You're getting cocky... Drive check!
Drive: Black Cannon Tiger (Critical)
Hugo: YES! All power to my vanguard Cannongear!
The defense made wasn't enough, and the hologram of Cannongear tramples both Iron tails.

Damage: Wyvern Guard, Barryi; Gatling Claw Dragon (Draw)
Yamato: ... Draw Trigger... Power Conroe... Draw...

Hugo: No defense? You're getting rust with your predictions! Noah Attack Iron Tail! (3D/5H)
Damage: Embodiment of Armor, Bahr.

Yamato: ... Draw... Ride Dragon Knight... Aleph... Call Embodiment of Spear... Tahr. Aleph's Counterblast... Superior Ride - Flips Berger and moves Tahr and Bahr to his soul, searching at his deck for a card - Embodiment of Victory... Aleph... Move Conroe and Call... Dragonic Overlord... Counterblast... - Flips the other 3 cards at his damage Zone - ... Eternal Flame... Now... Aleph's Soulblast - Moves Tahr, Aleph and Bahr from his soul to the Drop Zone - ... Unflip my damage... And use his counterblast... I think I don't need to do all this moves...

Hugo: No need... Continue.

Yamato: ... Right... He gets +3000 Attack... And extra critical... Call Bahr...
<><VA><DO>
<><BA><CR>
... Boosted by Conroe... Overlord Attack Rear Cannongear... - Hugo doesn't guard, moving the rearguard to the Drop Zone, Yamato Stands Overlord - And Now... Overlord Attacks Noah
Hugo: Guard with Black Cannon Tiger! - moves the card to the guard zone, then to the Drop Zone

Yamato: ... Right... Boosted by Bahr... Aleph Attack Cannongear...
Hugo: Guard with Dragon Egg and Savage Warrior! One trigger to pass!
T. Drive: Dragonic Overlord; Flame Seed Salamander. (Stand)
Yamato: ... Stand trigger... Power Aleph... Overlord Stands... - Stands Overlord.
Hugo: T-That's not good...
Damage: Savage Shaman (Heal) and Winged Dragon, Skyptera.
Hugo: Heal trigger... I don't heal but I give the power to my vanguard.

Yamato: ...Overlord Attack Noah Again... - This time, there's no guard and he moves Noah to the drop zone, Yamato felt that something wasn't right as he moves his shining eyes to Hugo as he stands overlord - And I attack Cannongear...
Damage: Archbird
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The game was over at the prediction. hugo moved his cards back to the deck. Could be noticed that he was ashamed of what happened, but even so, contineud with his head up as he greets Yamato

Hugo: Thanks for the game. I'll apologize to the boys that joined my team, but I though I could bend your legend here!

Yamato was thinking as he greets Hugo. Next to them...

Edrien: He have his own legend?

Yurei: Yamato repeated his sophomore Year on purpose... He would be Hugo's classmate if wasn't for that... But till now, He never lost a game... And the games always ended at his predictions. It's awesome!

Edrien nods his head. While Yamato Fix his cards, a shadow appears in front of Yurei and Edrien, but at the other side of the table.

???????: You expected another round with Archbird, don't you?

The Four of them look to the person that told that, a girl wearing a gothic lolita dress. She had eye bags under her eyes and a long, braided dark blue hair

Yamato: ... How... Do you know that..?

???????: Your expression - Moves her left hand in front of her face - You were impressed that he didn't guarded Noah. Even with a right prediction, it didn't went perfectly as you wanted.

Hugo: Weren't you suppose to be close to the Dark Army... Thereza?

Thereza: ... - The girl's face inflates with air, like a kid angry about something as she looks to the side without moving her head - Why I would be with them if he didn't let me be with them?

Yurei pulls Hugo's shirt and whispers at his ear, getting an answer in whispers too. Yamato simply sighs as he knew what was going on

Yurei: YOU'RE IN! - Connects the point of his fingers above his head, forming an "O". Edrien and the girl were confuse with that, as he points to Edrien - The skills to defeat evil - points to Thereza - and the one that need to proof that the evildoes are wrong! You're perfect for our team!

The were even more confused. Yamato was cleaning the place, as they were done there.

Yamato: ... He meant... That you two have fulfilled the needs to be at our team... And believe me: He'll not stop until you're in... So I'll say this now: Welcome aboard to the team...

Yurei: We're the bringers of PEACE! - Does a Hero Pose - The messengers of HOPE! - Another Hero Pose - We Follow JUSTICE! We're team SUPERIOR JUSTICE! - And at his final pose, Yurei looks tot he side after some minutes, noticing  Yamato organizing the Stand - Hey! You were suppose to activate the fireworks!

Yamato: ... I'll not cause more trouble... Remember last year's... Presentation..? You almost banned the team... - Yurei nods, remembering it

As Edrien scratched his head with a simple smile, Thereza was laughing a lot, pointing at them. After that, they all were cleaning the stand and putting it down. The time moved fast there, as people lost sight of it with tests and invitations.

As the day was over, the four fo them went to the "JUSTICE DORM!" as Yurei wrote at a piece of paper that was a the door of their place. With only two rooms with two beds, Thereza and Edrien were roomates, as both accepted Yamato's option to not be at the same room as Yurei, that didn't shut his mouth.

All of them were tired, but the impressive was Thereza sleeping at the moment she sat at her bed. Carefully, Edrien let her body laying at the bed. He smiled a little and moved to his bed, laying there and waiting for the next day.


ALSO, if the color/italic give trouble, tell me so I can change it. D=

Thanks,

Rolf.
Title: Re: Rolf's Fanfic: Superior JUSTICE!
Post by: Jai Hearts on July 14, 2014, 12:19:26 PM
not too shabby.

i love how creative you are with the school and everything.

by the looks of things you re mostly about straight up cardfighting.
while its not bad i hope to see something a little more entertaining in the future.
Title: Re: Rolf's Fanfic: Superior JUSTICE!
Post by: Rolfagia on July 14, 2014, 04:48:27 PM
not too shabby.

i love how creative you are with the school and everything.

by the looks of things you re mostly about straight up cardfighting.
while its not bad i hope to see something a little more entertaining in the future.


Thanks. =P

Early chapters are, indeed, more CF focused, but after a while it changes, not so "start then CF". It'll get better

Chapter one was done Dec 2012, 8 days later I did chapter 2 so first ones will be similar.
Title: Re: Rolf's Fanfic: Superior JUSTICE!
Post by: Jai Hearts on July 14, 2014, 07:19:20 PM
not too shabby.

i love how creative you are with the school and everything.

by the looks of things you re mostly about straight up cardfighting.
while its not bad i hope to see something a little more entertaining in the future.


Thanks. =P

Early chapters are, indeed, more CF focused, but after a while it changes, not so "start then CF". It'll get better

Chapter one was done Dec 2012, 8 days later I did chapter 2 so first ones will be similar.


go with what you feel is right.
Title: Re: Rolf's Fanfic: Superior JUSTICE!
Post by: katscaps kirisame on July 15, 2014, 01:13:50 PM
btw i just noticed, the MC in the first fight is a girl right? ...if you read carefully , somewhere you mention her as the boy look carefully

forget it, it was the other way
Title: Re: Rolf's Fanfic: Superior JUSTICE!
Post by: Rolfagia on July 28, 2014, 10:29:40 PM
btw i just noticed, the MC in the first fight is a girl right? ...if you read carefully , somewhere you mention her as the boy look carefully

forget it, it was the other way

xDD Happens... When I add the next chapter I'll fix it (Rairai did the edition for this chapter, I'll tell her later, but thanks).

Edit: Added chapter 2. =3

Another edition: Since we have a max character limit per post, I'll be unable to post the chapter 3 together with the others, so I'll add it here:

Chapter 3 - Trouble
The sound of the class ending was music to the students, as some of them went to the team's room, others to the cafeteria. Edrien waited Thereza, that was playing something at a portable game, what could maybe explain the bags under her eyes, as they went together meet Yamato and Yurei.

Sophomore's classroom away from the freshman's ones, so the both of them needed to walk all the way there. As Thereza continued to play the game, Edrien was uncomfortable to try talk with her, as they were from the same team, but was like they didn't even knew each other.

Edrien: ... Soo... D-Did you slept well? - Tried to start a conversarion - You look tired...

Thereza: Ah, it's nothing... That's normal - Answers him, without taking out her attention from the game, as she was smiling and pressing the buttons, even dodging people at her way without looking.

With a sigh, Edrien continued quiet, as he gave up on trying to make her talk with him. They continued walking until they hear something. Thereza stopped her game and looked before Edrien, as they watched some freshmans hitting the floor, throwing a glove away from him. His friends helped him to stand as the three of them ran away. Both walked to that direction slowly

???????: Heh, Bunch of losers... We should've bet more than simply money...

????: Next time let's get card! Without a proper deck they'll be kicked off or they'll have to play with lame decks, we would be at the top quickly!

Edrien: Hey, that's not right!

Edrien and Thereza  got there and noticed the two guys laughing, as another one was covering his face with a hood, the three watched the two appearing there.

Edrine: These are against the rules! you can't bet on cardfights!

???????: Oh... Really? And what proof you've that we're betting stuffs? It's your word against our! - Said the blonde one, that was playing before.

Edrien: Easy, We'll play a game of your rules... If you win, I'll give the amount you want. If we win, you'll stop this!

The blonde one laughs  as he was starting to prepare his deck, until the other one holds his shoulder and pulls it slowly.

????: Let me do it, you got your fun already. - He let his initial vanguard at the table as he puts his deck.

Edrien put his deck and his starting vanguard.

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Edrien: Sing with me, vanguard!
????: Stand Up, Vanguard!
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Edrien: Bermuda △ Cadet, Riviere!

????: Creeping Dark Goat! Draw! Ride Gururubau! I move Goat behind the Vanguard. (0D/5H)
<><GB><>
<><DG><>

Edrien: Draw! Ride Mermaid Idol, Riviere. I look the top seven - Watching the top cards, holds one - I'll add Super Idol, Riviere to my hand - Shuffles the deck - And I attack your Gururubau!
<><MR><>
<><><>
Drive: Mermaid Idol, Riviere.
Damage: Abyss Freezer (Draw).
????: Draw Trigger! - Draw.

Edrien: End (0D/ 7H)

????: Draw! I ride Cursed Lancer and activate Goat's counterblast! - Flips freezer, moves Goat to the soul, looking the top five cards - Here, I'll add Origin Mage, Ildona to my hand and call Black Sage, Charon, to boost my vanguard.
<><CL><>
<><BC><>
Cursed Lance attack!
Drive: Skull Witch, Nemain
Damage: Miltoa

????: Lance attack hits, so I unflip my damage. End! (1D/6H)

Edrien: Draw! Ride Super Idol, Riviere - Draw a card - I call Miltoa to boost the Vanguard - Both draw - And call another Miltoa and a Aqua - Both draw again.
<><SR><AQ>
<><MT><MT>
Boosted by Miltoa, Riviere Atack!
????: No guard!
Drive: Drive Quartet, Flows (Heal)
Edrien: Heal Triger! I give the power to Aqua and heal - Moves Miltoa to the Drop Zone
Damage: Darkness Maiden, Macha

Edrien: Aqua attack boosted by Miltoa (0D/8H)
Damage: Grim Reaper (Critical)

????: Power to the Vanguard. Draw! Ride, Origin Mage, Ildona! I call Skull Witch, Nemain. Counterblast - Flips Abyss Freezer and Discards other Abyss Freezer - Draw two cards. Call Gururubau, Witch of Nostrum, Arianhod and Cursed Lance!
<CL><IL><NM>
<AH><BC><GR>
Ildonna, Boosted By Charon, Attack!
Edrien: No Guard.
T. Drive: Dark Mage, Badhabh Caar,  Demon World Castle, Fatalita.
Damage: Top Idol, Riviere.

????: Boosted By Gururubau, Nemain attack!
Edrien: Guard with Mermaid Idol, Riviere!

????: Cursed Lance attack with Arianrod Boost! (3D/7H)
Damage: Drive Quartet, Shuplu (critical).
The man unflips the Abyss Freezer damage.

Edrien: Power Vanguard, Draw! Ride Super Idol, Ceram! Call Izumi and Sedna.
<IZ><CR><AQ>
<SN><MT><MT>
Boosted by  Miltoa, Ceram Attack Ildona! Counterblast - Flips Top Idol, Riviere
T.Drive  Comical Rainie (Critical)
Edrien: Critical Trigger! Power Aqua and critical Vanguard - Checks Aqua
Damage: Fatalita, Abyss Healer (Heal)
????: Heal Trigger! I heal and give the power to the Vanguard! - moves

Edrien: Aqua, boosted by Miltoa attack!
????:  Guard with Grim Reaper!

Edrien: Izumi, boosted by Sedna, Attack! (2D/7H)

????: Nemain's Intercept! Draw! I call Skull Witch, Nemain. Counterblast! - Discards Fatalita and flips Abyss Freezer, drawing two cards.
<CL><IL><NM>
<AH><BC><GR>
Nemain, boosted by Gururubau, Attack!
Edrien: Intercept with Aqua!

????: Boosted by Charon, Ildona  Attack! And now, Limit Break! Counterblast - Flips two damages and retired nemain and Gururubau, drawing two cards - Attack Ceram!
Edrien: No guard.
T.Drive: Death Feather Eagle (Critica).
????: Critical Trigger! critical Vanguard, Power Lance! - Check Ildona.
Damage: Cooking Caspi (Draw).
Edrien: Draw Trigger! Power Vanguard - Draws. Checks Drive Quartet, Bubling - Another draw trigger! Power vanguard! - Draw

????: Darn! Cursed Lance, boosted by Arianrod, attack! (4D/9H)
Edrien: Guard with Flute. Draw! - Edrien smiles - Famous Singer of the seven seas, enter in stage! Ride! Top idol, Riviere! And i call Super Idol, Ceram!
<IZ><TR><CR>
<SN><MT><MT>
Boosted By Miltoa, Riviere Attack!

For a moment, the person in a hood coughed few times, The one playing smiled. Thereza gave a quick look to the person
????: No guard
Thereza: ... Edrien...
T.Check: Izumi, Top idol, Riviere
Damage: Fatalita

Thereza: ... Edrien...

Edrien: Persona blast!

????: W-Wait there no need to.

Thereza: Edrien Stop!
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With the scream, The boy got shocked and as his hand was moving Riviere to the Drop Zone, he was forced to stop as a hand hold his arm   .

?????: Bullying others in a cardgame when they can't guard themselves isn't the propper way to do a game!

Edrien looked to the  person holding him. It was clearly a Senior, wearing a black uniform with other two guys behind of him. the boy looks back to the opponent and notices that his hand, that was full before, had only two cards and he even his Cursed Lance wasn't at the field.

?????: You have luck boy, if you continued the action, we would need to do something about it. - He look to the other group, that were only the two boys now. - Sethrien Solon and Kane Mallian, you may go now. - Kane take his cards and run away with Sethrien, as the man look at Edrien - Edrien Shintallas, I'm Wayne Allond. This is the First and Last warning: Do this again and we from the Disciplinary Committee'll ahve to punish you - Wayne releases his hand. - No need to go back to your room, but don't try this again, got it?!

Edrien tried to argue with them, as Wayne turns himself and walk away with the other two. Thereza helped him to get his deck back and calm him down,a s both continue their move to meed Yurei and Yamato... As this time, Thereza turned her game off.

Chapter 4 - Chat

After the problem with Wayne, Kane and Sethrien, the two new members of the Superior JUSTICE team finally were together with the other members. Yamato and Yurei completed a Vanguard field.

Yamato: ... Late...

Thereza: Sorry. - Scratched her head, thinking on how she should tell that -  Edrien tried to stop some bullies and...

Yurei: Disciplinary Committee problems? I don't like their vision of Justice. - Yurei interrupted the explanation - Specially Wayne... His justice's not the real justice.

For a moment, Yurei looked fixed on what he said, nothing like the animated guy from the last day. Both freshmans watched it, confuse about how they knew what happened.

Yamato: ... Yurei had... Problems last year... With them...

Yurei: Wayne thinks that the simple victory's the real justice, that the games itself became a bullying action if you force your opponent beyond the necessary. - He shakes slowly his head to the sides - But that's NOT! the moment - Stands quickly form his chair, scaring Edrien and Thereza. - We can ahve this talk about different Justices another time! Now we need to explain two things

As Yurei Formed a "v" with his right hand's index and middle fingers, Both freshmans looked to each other, confuse, then looked back to the senior, that was younger than both but had more energy than the three together.

Yurei: The first is: in  One week well have the freshman teams tournament. The teams that have freshmans can participate, where they're the only ones that can play. Best of three games, and in our case you two'll need to win all the games because we'll already forfeit one due lack or new members, but we know you two can do it!

The situation was confuse for both. They understood that it was going to have a tournament and they needed to win because the team had only two freshman. They saw the vanguard field done, as a game was happening before they get there

Edrien: So... And how's your g-

Yurei: The second's this! - The boy spreads his arms wide to show the field - This's a copy of your homework test! Everything's already fixed in the places so you two can solve it!.

Thereza: And... How you k-

Yamato: ... We had that class... Last year... - Sighs

Yurei: As Yamato said! We'll not give you the answer, since isn't fair, but we can help you to get there! Let me explain:

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Thanks to [FT] Neo for being the Spike Brothers player on the field
It's a fixed moment of a game, Spike Brothers versus Gold Paladin. Dark Zone versus United Sanctuary, Gamers versus Warriors, Football Ball against weapons, Evil ver-

Yamato: ... Back to the point...

Yurei: Oh right! - Shuffles his head - So, As you can see, the Spike Brother's field has Demonic Lord, Dudley Emperor as the Vanguard, and three more Rearguards: Two Wonder Boy and a Dudley Daisy. The Gold Paladin field's complete:  Spectral Duke Dragon as the Vanguard boosted by Gareth, Player of the Holt bow, Viviane boosted by Advance of the Black Chains, Kahedin and a Lop Ear Shooter boosted by a Player of the Holy Axe Nimue. What are the other information you received?

Edrien and Thereza took the homework sheet and started to read it.

Edrien: Says that the Spike Brothers starts with two damage, The player's hand's: Silence Joker, Dudley Dan, Reckless Express and Spike Boouncer and the order of some cards from the deck is: Juggernaut Maximum, Panzer Gale, Wonder Boy, Cheer Girl,Tiara, Sonic Breaker. It also informs that besides the first Vanguard attack, the Spike Brothers player'll let the first Vgs attack passa and all other attacks are guarded with 1 trigger pass, so no overguard'll happen.

Thereza: The Gold Paladin Player would be us, the ones that need to end this game at this turn. 4 damage, no hand and the cards avaliable in order are: Silent Punisher, Spectral Duke Dragon, Elixir Sommeliere, White Hare in the Moon's Shadow, Pellinore, Knight of Elegant Skills, Gareth, Player of the Holy Axe, Nimue, Flame of Victory.

The two of them analyzed the field, the topcards and noticed it as the exact order. They would need to search for the cards, or doing something to act like the cards, but this way's easier to understand and solve the test! Both were smiling like kids as they noticed that, thanking both of them.

Yamato: ... Advice... No rooms for misplays... You've all the information you need... Any wrong action is a misplay...

Both nodded and started to see the field a little more, thinking. Yurei completes with his loud voice echoing through the place:

Yurei: Why you don't try it? It's a test, so it need to be solved!
Title: Re: Rolf's Fanfic: Superior JUSTICE!
Post by: Alex Toshiki on August 03, 2014, 02:46:25 AM
Sweet!!! i love the chapter 1 also 2  and 3 too, dude make a fan serie or something like that you made an awesome work like jai said you do a great work :3 love it :)
Title: Re: Rolf's Fanfic: Superior JUSTICE!
Post by: Rolfagia on August 04, 2014, 04:08:08 PM
Sweet!!! i love the chapter 1 also 2  and 3 too, dude make a fan serie or something like that you made an awesome work like jai said you do a great work :3 love it :)

Thanks, I'm adding chap 4 right now =3